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Here are the corrections that the professor wants changed.Note that the essay needs a thesis statement, as well as four sources, twofrom Soomo if desired, but all must be credible and authoritative. In addition,each body paragraph needs to be developed with relevant examples or statistics,that is, each must contain 1-2 documented sources per paragraph and must useparaphrases, quotes, or summaries properly to avoid plagiarism. The essay mustalso address the opinions or concerns that your audience might have—that is theopposing viewpoints.There are are issues with sentence structure and grammar (in particular,check use of prepositions), but those you can review and fix as well.